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« Reply #225 on: Oct 10, 2015 11:57 am »

See, I could buy "Looks like you should put more 'try' in triad" happening that way. And I get that Mako has an awkward/dorky side, but coming up with a list of one liners combined with the 'beat cop trying to make detective' thing right out of the gate felt like a 180 to me.

They had to come up with something for the brothers to do. Mako is there because he's the Avatar's boyfriend. Bolin is there because he is Mako's brother - the person who is the Avatar's boyfriend. Asami is there because the company that is now besmirched and tainted by the events of Book 1 is failing.
I guess the government just takes your biplanes rather than pay you since helping the Avatar doesn't count for anything? Oh hey Eska and Desna. Oh hey Varrick. How are you three?

He was already the most multidimensional anyway.

I'd add a line back in episode 1 of Book 2 somewhere that brings about a look of "oh snap!" on Tenzin and Tonraq's face before the big reveal. Like "So Korra can talk to Aang now," and Tenzin just starts to wipe his brow with a nearby lemur and hands it off to Tonraq so he can use it.
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« Reply #226 on: Oct 26, 2015 01:07 pm »

I would have probably added in something for Rohan, both in terms of dialogue and action. Like, I'd probably have him do a bit of airbending at some point (nothing major, just something to show he is an airbender), and maybe give him a bit of dialogue in most of his scenes, even if it was just a line. At the very least, I'd have him say something during his last appearance, when Pema catches him and goes to clean him off.

I'd also probably have some kind of interaction with Rohan and Jinora and Meelo, at some point in the series. I mean, none of the older kids really interact much with their baby brother, but at least Ikki spoke to him when he was born and we saw her hug him goodbye before they went to look for Korra. With Jinora and Meelo, it almost feels like they have no relationship at all with Rohan.
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« Reply #227 on: Oct 27, 2015 01:52 pm »

I would have probably added in something for Rohan, both in terms of dialogue and action. Like, I'd probably have him do a bit of airbending at some point (nothing major, just something to show he is an airbender), and maybe give him a bit of dialogue in most of his scenes, even if it was just a line. At the very least, I'd have him say something during his last appearance, when Pema catches him and goes to clean him off.

I'd also probably have some kind of interaction with Rohan and Jinora and Meelo, at some point in the series. I mean, none of the older kids really interact much with their baby brother, but at least Ikki spoke to him when he was born and we saw her hug him goodbye before they went to look for Korra. With Jinora and Meelo, it almost feels like they have no relationship at all with Rohan.

Maybe Rohan airbending a little gust of wind when saying goodbye to the other airkids in book 4?
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« Reply #228 on: Oct 29, 2015 04:48 am »

I would have probably added in something for Rohan, both in terms of dialogue and action. Like, I'd probably have him do a bit of airbending at some point (nothing major, just something to show he is an airbender), and maybe give him a bit of dialogue in most of his scenes, even if it was just a line. At the very least, I'd have him say something during his last appearance, when Pema catches him and goes to clean him off.

I'd also probably have some kind of interaction with Rohan and Jinora and Meelo, at some point in the series. I mean, none of the older kids really interact much with their baby brother, but at least Ikki spoke to him when he was born and we saw her hug him goodbye before they went to look for Korra. With Jinora and Meelo, it almost feels like they have no relationship at all with Rohan.

Maybe Rohan airbending a little gust of wind when saying goodbye to the other airkids in book 4?

Yeah, something like that.

I'd probably also have a scene of his family actually explaining to him what's going on when he has to leave with the Air Acolytes, because the way it's played out in canon, it almost seems like Pema and the older kids decided to stay while Tenzin brought Rohan to the Acolytes, and the poor kid had no idea what was going on.
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« Reply #229 on: Nov 03, 2015 12:28 pm »

I would have probably added in something for Rohan, both in terms of dialogue and action. Like, I'd probably have him do a bit of airbending at some point (nothing major, just something to show he is an airbender), and maybe give him a bit of dialogue in most of his scenes, even if it was just a line. At the very least, I'd have him say something during his last appearance, when Pema catches him and goes to clean him off.

I'd also probably have some kind of interaction with Rohan and Jinora and Meelo, at some point in the series. I mean, none of the older kids really interact much with their baby brother, but at least Ikki spoke to him when he was born and we saw her hug him goodbye before they went to look for Korra. With Jinora and Meelo, it almost feels like they have no relationship at all with Rohan.

Maybe Rohan airbending a little gust of wind when saying goodbye to the other airkids in book 4?

Heck, have the kid bend a few rocks or sneeze fire instead. Cheesy A nod back to Katara's prediction that the baby would be another airbender and have it proven wrong. 
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« Reply #230 on: Nov 09, 2015 09:31 pm »

I would have given Jinora a bassarse fight scene
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« Reply #231 on: Nov 09, 2015 10:35 pm »

A contender appears!

I don't know if Jinora could take on such a formidable opponent.  Shocked

All jokes aside, Jinora coming up with the idea for the huge tornado was pretty badass. And she's not really about fighting, as shown in TLOK. Speaking of being about the fight...

Scene I'd add: something where Korra can just totally unleash on her opponent for a good while, longer than her Vaatu fight, a fight to match the Aang Vs. Ozai showdown. Perhaps something linked to Kuvira - except not at Kuvira herself?

Maybe instead of the Colossus being unsupported, it has metalbender tanks and foot troops supporting it, Korra almost single-handedly keeping them and some un-EMP'd mechasuits that come in as reinforcements occupied while the hummingbird mechasuits get into position?

Lines I'd add or tweak: Things to make it clearer that Suyin and Opal weren't lying about Kuvira's crimes, but still retain a bit of Su's hypocritical nature - perhaps Suyin and Baatar Jr. scene changed to:
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Baatar Jr.: Where am I? Mom?
Su: Just rest, son. I'm here.
Baatar Jr.: Mom, I'm so sorry. I betrayed you- the whole family. I gave my life to Kuvira, and she just fired that weapon at me. How could she do that?
Su: I don't know, sweetie. She's a complicated person.
Baatar Jr.: I... don't call me sweetie, mother - if you knew the things I helped her do...
Su: What do you mean? I thought -
Baatar Jr.: No, mother - if you were going to say it was just Kuvira, you're wrong. (Su's eyes widen) We ruled together, after all. The waterbender and firebender camps, the crushing of dissidence, conscription, forcing those who resisted to work 'for the betterment of the Empire'... And I was the one overseeing that horrible weapon's design, after Varrick fled.
Su: I knew Opal and I were right, and the rumors... I guess they were right too. (Smiles weakly)But here you are. Turned against Kuvira. That doesn't matter.
Baatar Jr.: Yes. But it still matters, mother - everything I've done... father, Huan, Wing and Wei will never forgive me. And Opal...
Su: Yeah, they might take some time to come around, (takes Baatar's hand) but we'll work through it- as a family. (gives him a concerned look) Even if you did all that, I'm sure whatever happens, you won't be punished the same as Kuvira. (appears determined) You helped, told us the Colossus' weakness - so I'll make sure that you aren't lumped in with her.
Baatar Jr.: No - it can't be like that. My hands - stained as well. Mother, I ... (coughs) Tired. So tired... (sighs deeply) I hope Korra can beat her...
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« Reply #232 on: Nov 16, 2015 06:40 pm »

I like that dialogue, but I'd make the small tweak of Su's eyes not going wide at Baatar's refutation, but rather squeezing shut in one last act of fading denial.
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« Reply #233 on: Nov 16, 2015 10:50 pm »

I like that dialogue, but I'd make the small tweak of Su's eyes not going wide at Baatar's refutation, but rather squeezing shut in irritation that he's making her cover up harder.

FTFY.  Tongue 
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« Reply #234 on: Nov 17, 2015 10:27 am »

I know it's been said before, but I really wish Korra eventually gave Mako more than a "I don't know" when he found out about the letters.
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« Reply #235 on: Nov 17, 2015 10:30 am »

Yeah, that would have been nice. Drop it in either in Reunion or in Beyond the Wilds. As it is, I guess you could assume they talked a bit off-screen.
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« Reply #236 on: Nov 17, 2015 02:56 pm »

In accordance with my theory of the char that should've died, imma modify a bit of the ending.

-Korra and Kuvira are fighting, the mech is damaged and get ready to fall-

KORRA : It's over Kuvira, give up, this machine is coming down and we got to go !

-KORRA begins to leave but a rock slam her back and sent her flying into a wall, dazed, she barely dodge a metal spear.-

KUVIRA : Giving up ? NEVAH !

-KUVIRA and KORRA fight it out, KUVIRA is overwhelmed but continue fighting in spite of her injuries, surprising KORRA with her determination at some points, the Avatar is the stronger one though, and she defeat KUVIRA with a powerful air gust that slams her into a console. The Avatar try to help again but an explosion strikes and she has to back up reluctantly. KUVIRA gets back up, "walks" to the center of the room and take one last proud stance, eyes closed and in spite of gravity, before the mech crash, killing her.-

-KORRA lands away and looks at the debris silently, SU arrives, snarling.-

SU : She's dead;

KORRA sadly nods, SU smiles with a psychopathic glee but hide it to KORRA.

KORRA : Her ideals were wrong but she fought to the very end.

SU -snarling again- : KORRA, are you having respect for that madwoman ?!

KORRA looks at SU and raise an eyebrow.

SU : I mean... I'm going to... give her a proper burial.

SU search Kuvira's body, probably to put it in her "trophy" room or something.

See ? Su is written in a way that fit with the Fans's view of her !
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« Reply #237 on: Dec 12, 2015 12:23 am »

In hindsight, I would've liked to have seen more spirits in Republic City. Even if it was just small appearances in the background, I think it would've gone a long way. Show that the physical and spirit worlds have been permanently changed because of Avatar Korra's decision to let the portals remain opened. Like for example, maybe after three-year timeskip and everyone has gotten over the initial shock, the show could've done little things to show both humans and spirits co-existing peacefully.



Show humans and spirits are both inhabiting the city now...



When the Krew would travel, maybe show spirits checking into hotels, going to the movers, eating at restaurants along with humans...



Show that both sides have have developed friendships and new lives in this brand new world that Korra helped to create.

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« Reply #238 on: Dec 12, 2015 09:13 am »

In hindsight, I would've liked to have seen more spirits in Republic City. Even if it was just small appearances in the background, I think it would've gone a long way. Show that the physical and spirit worlds have been permanently changed because of Avatar Korra's decision to let the portals remain opened. Like for example, maybe after three-year timeskip and everyone has gotten over the initial shock, the show could've done little things to show both humans and spirits co-existing peacefully.

Yeah, one thing I didn't like was that we saw the spirits being a pain in the Book 3 opening, but when the show returned there at the start of Book 4 they revealed that everybody was suddenly getting along. It would have been nice to see how they got to that point. The spirits choosing to return to the city at the end didn't really mean much to me- if we'd seen more of the stuff you've suggested, it might have had more of an impact.
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« Reply #239 on: Dec 13, 2015 12:10 am »

I imagine after Korra's epic battle against Unavaatu, having spirits as antagonists again in book 3 or 4 would end up feeling repetitive. And I can understand how introducing any new spirit characters or subplots surrounding them could take away screen time from Korra and her Krew.

Still, from much the characters talked about the ramifications of joining the spirit world and physical worlds, we really don't see much change. There's one hedgehog spirit who complains to Korra in the season premiere, a couple who tag along with Korra on her three month quest, a few here or there in the background of the desert and.. that's it. Not exactly anything that shows that the lives of humans, spirits and the state of their worlds have been significantly altered for the next millennia or two.        
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« Reply #240 on: Dec 15, 2015 10:30 pm »

Yeah, I don't want the spirits to reappear as full antagonists. But I would have liked to see a transition from them disliking the humans of RC to gradually finding a way to live together. Especially since some of the previous spirits we've seen have gotten angry at pollution and deforestation, but these ones are living in one of the most modernised locations in the world.

It would have been kind of interesting to see a character like Asami- somebody who relies on technology and isn't particularly spiritual- learning to live with them. It could lead into the Book 4 reveal that she's redesigned the city's infrastructure- if she was one of the people who first appeased the spirits, it'd make sense that she'd be chosen for the project, and could do it in a way that wouldn't upset human/ spirit relations. Could potentially set up the idea of spirit vine energy earlier too- with the spirits voluntarily offering small amounts of spirit vines in exchange for something. Maybe in small amounts it could be used as a kind of clean energy?
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« Reply #241 on: Jan 30, 2016 12:23 pm »

I'd probably like to have a little scene of Korra and Rohan properly meeting, since while they've met before, Korra's been gone for most of Rohan's life, and left when he was too young to really remember her. Actually, I think that I would have liked to just have a scene or even just a moment, of interaction between Korra and Rohan.
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« Reply #242 on: Feb 13, 2016 06:35 pm »

Where do I start? I'd change everything. First, the order of villains would be zaheer, amon, kuvira, unalaq. Then... Well, I'd basically rewrite the entire series. So no, no small lines or scenes to add lol
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« Reply #243 on: Feb 13, 2016 07:15 pm »

Kuvira: (frowns at Zhu Li) You swore your loyalty to me, and I gave you a chance at greatness. (grabs the pin as she turns furious) This is how you repay me?

(Switch to a close up of Zhu Li as she is at first fearful but then glares at Kuvira defiantly.)

Zhu Li: I love Varrick more than I fear y---

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« Reply #244 on: Feb 13, 2016 11:24 pm »

Never thought of that order before, ATLA_FAN. I like that change, StormyDaze.

One very "small' change: fix the final shot to be more overt. Make it so they don't have to make a post on tumblr to clarify what should have been a clear cut case, even if it was still a horribly sub-par execution even with this fix. I seriously got a more shippy, yet in a "I don't want to punch the screen right now" way, kind of feeling from this screen:

than I did its more infamous brother:

At least make them smile broader in the final shot. The first picture I posted seems more legit than the second. Even the first shot - make the edges of their mouths more upturned, deeper smile. Sometimes I wonder if they were trying to see how subtle they could make it on purpose.
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« Reply #245 on: Feb 14, 2016 12:19 am »

Never thought of that order before, ATLA_FAN. I like that change, StormyDaze.

One very "small' change: fix the final shot to be more overt. Make it so they don't have to make a post on tumblr to clarify what should have been a clear cut case, even if it was still a horribly sub-par execution even with this fix.

Why not just ditch the final scene altogether and replace it with one that actually has something to do with Korra's story arc?  Maybe deal with the fact that Republic City is in need of a serious pick-me-up due to all of the necessary rebuilding?  No?
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« Reply #246 on: Feb 14, 2016 01:52 am »

That's a big change, replacing the final scene, shifting focus onto "Republic City needs rebuilding". Changing the lines that make up Asami and Korra's lips to effect the subtle shift I described is much less work. If I wanted to talk about big changes or complaints - which at this point, a year out, I guess I really don't - I'd go to Angry Spirits.

Furthermore, it's pretty obvious from first viewing that RC needs rebuilding, and Tenzin even says as much, what with Raiko's plan. Korrasami being a canon 100% "they're dating/in love with each other" - not so much; even if you can tell they're a couple, I did NOT get the "in love" vibe Bryan talked about from my first viewing. Reiterating RC needs rebuilding after what Tenzin already said of it wouldn't have as big an impact as smoothing and refining subtle things relating to Korrasami, like how they look at one another, how big their smiles are drawn, the musical score behind them...

Speaking of scenes I'd add - take a look at this fanart of the Sato family:

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I really like this. Even if it was just a short scene, even shorter than what we got for Zuko’s family life, this would have been really good in the actual show, for both Asami, and the two bending brothers. Maybe even Kuvira as well, her abandonment.

Instead of four seasons of showing and telling, we got more telling than showing… Oh well.
Tarrlok and Noatak got plot/character flashbacks. Korra saw the Yakone flashbacks. Tonraq and to an extent Unalaq got plot/character flashbacks. After Season 2, they sort of vanished, Old Wounds with Lin and Su, Korra Alone and some more background on Kuvira's break with Su etc notwithstanding.

Some kind of flashbacks, even as short as the ones Zuko had of him and his mother, would have helped add weight.
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« Reply #247 on: Feb 14, 2016 08:43 am »

That's a big change, replacing the final scene, shifting focus onto "Republic City needs rebuilding". Changing the lines that make up Asami and Korra's lips to effect the subtle shift I described is much less work. If I wanted to talk about big changes or complaints - which at this point, a year out, I guess I really don't - I'd go to Angry Spirits.

It's still only one scene that's being changed.  *shrugs*


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Furthermore, it's pretty obvious from first viewing that RC needs rebuilding, and Tenzin even says as much, what with Raiko's plan. Korrasami being a canon 100% "they're dating/in love with each other" - not so much; even if you can tell they're a couple, I did NOT get the "in love" vibe Bryan talked about from my first viewing. Reiterating RC needs rebuilding after what Tenzin already said of it wouldn't have as big an impact as smoothing and refining subtle things relating to Korrasami, like how they look at one another, how big their smiles are drawn, the musical score behind them...

It's obvious that RC needs rebuilding, but not that Korra's going to be relevant in fixing it, which is absurd given that it's her show.  Instead, she leaves to go on a completely out-of-character vacation with someone she doesn't even seem particularly interested in.

The way to fix that isn't to make her more obviously in love.  The way to fix it is to ditch the nonsense "love" scene altogether.


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I really like this. Even if it was just a short scene, even shorter than what we got for Zuko’s family life, this would have been really good in the actual show, for both Asami, and the two bending brothers. Maybe even Kuvira as well, her abandonment.

Instead of four seasons of showing and telling, we got more telling than showing… Oh well.
Tarrlok and Noatak got plot/character flashbacks. Korra saw the Yakone flashbacks. Tonraq and to an extent Unalaq got plot/character flashbacks. After Season 2, they sort of vanished, Old Wounds with Lin and Su, Korra Alone and some more background on Kuvira's break with Su etc notwithstanding.

Some kind of flashbacks, even as short as the ones Zuko had of him and his mother, would have helped add weight.

This, on the other hand, I agree about completely.  Asami desperately needed a flashback and never really got one.
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« Reply #248 on: Feb 14, 2016 12:33 pm »

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Furthermore, it's pretty obvious from first viewing that RC needs rebuilding, and Tenzin even says as much, what with Raiko's plan. Korrasami being a canon 100% "they're dating/in love with each other" - not so much; even if you can tell they're a couple, I did NOT get the "in love" vibe Bryan talked about from my first viewing. Reiterating RC needs rebuilding after what Tenzin already said of it wouldn't have as big an impact as smoothing and refining subtle things relating to Korrasami, like how they look at one another, how big their smiles are drawn, the musical score behind them...

It's obvious that RC needs rebuilding, but not that Korra's going to be relevant in fixing it, which is absurd given that it's her show.  Instead, she leaves to go on a completely out-of-character vacation with someone she doesn't even seem particularly interested in.

The way to fix that isn't to make her more obviously in love.  The way to fix it is to ditch the nonsense "love" scene altogether.
My aim with the change was to make the ending better executed in what they wanted to happen and come across. To do that properly as a whole, they'd have needed to add more leadup, or tweak existing scenes to have more impact and be a bit more obvious. Hell, even just having Asami repeat or bring up her infamous(in a good way)"I want you to know that I'm here for you. If you ever want to talk, or anything," line would have helped.

As far as Korra being relevant to rebuilding Republic City... Unless they did something like I did in my fic on a whim, adding "synthesis" of metallic and earthen based things using all four elements, I don't really see how Korra would be relevant to fixing Republic City's infrastructure. If anything, that would be Asami. Korra would still have a job to do, trying to make sure the whole Earth Empire transition is as smooth as possible, but unless they have Korra figuring out how to use all four elements to make earth and metal-based objects rapidly (like part of a skyscraper or apartment complex...) I don't see why she'd be relevant.

See this from Season 3 as well, A Breath of Fresh Air:
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Korra: I know the people's point of view. It's bad.
Tenzin: You're not the President, Korra. Your job isn't to fix the daily problems of every person in Republic City. Your responsibility is to bring balance to the entire world. And that means no matter what you do, some people  are not going to be happy about it.
Your sh*t getting ruined by a knock-down drag-out fight in your city, then a massive mecha exploding, and then a new Spirit Portal being formed in downtown isn't exactly a "daily problem", but given we haven't seen bending being used to help construct modern infrastructure, and there's no "synthesis", I don't see what Korra would be doing in Republic City. If anything she'd be in the Earth Kingdom.

It still doesn't make her decision to go on a vacation any less selfish or off - I may not have specified it at first in my fic, but I intended their vacation to be 2-3 days in what I wrote, even if it ended up being all of 45 minutes(lol). The full month Mike has them gone from what I've heard is beyond excessive.

Speaking of which... I guess I would have added something like this, addressing multiple concerns at once, said as they walk towards the crater:
Asami: Wow... I knew the crater was bad, but seeing it again... it's still hard to believe. How much was destroyed today. *takes a deep breath, a single tear falling down her face* It's a good thing Zhu Li got away. If we hadn't known Kuvira was coming... a lot more people than my father would have died today. Hundreds of thousands...
Korra: *looking distraught* Maybe... this isn't a good idea. And the Earth Empire...
Asami: *stopping in the crater* Wait. What do you mean? What's the Earth Empire got to do with anything? I was just... thinking out loud. I want to see the Spirit World, and you said it "sounded perfect".
Korra: *sighs* Sorry, random thought about what happened today - wondering if whoever is below Kuvira, below Baatar Jr. is going to come quietly... A short vacation does sound perfect, but... if you can't enjoy it now, maybe we should wait. *eyes brighten* Oh! Asami - want to talk to Katara? She helped me after I got poisoned. *pregnant pause*
Asami: *eyebrow raised* And Toph? What about her? You didn't mention her. *smiles slightly*
Korra: *laughs weakly* There was a reason I didn't mention her... but if you want to go to the Spirit World, and I... I'm looking for someone to help you, maybe both of us. *eyes light up again* I know just who we can talk to!
Asami: Who?
Korra: Zuko's uncle, Iroh! *pause, grasping Asami's hand* If I remember right... he dealt with a very personal loss.
Asami: Wait - oh. His son...
Korra: *nods* And he was around after the Hundred Year's War... Maybe he can help me out too.
*Asami gives her a slightly annoyed glare* Asami: I know what else the crater reminded me of - rebuilding, and all the work Future Indus - *visibly annoyed and slightly angry* rats! So much talk about business. I thought this was supposed to be a vacation. And what was that about "short" earlier?
Korra: *a little taken back* Oh, don't worry - Iroh is really friendly. Don't worry about feeling stressed while we talk - the first time I met him was during Harmonic Convergence, and we both know how fun that time was. But he still made me feel welcomed and warm. *smiles* And a few minutes with him feels like a long time - in a good way. I'll tell you more on the way in.
*Asami nods, sighing a little* Asami: Sorry - I was just hoping to see more of the Spirit World. A longer time...
*Korra now approaching Portal again, tugging on Asami's hand* Korra: With him helping guide us, I think even two or three "out here" days will be enough. And I'll have all my bending, so we'll be safe. Come on. *Asami nods, coming with her* Anyways - Iroh said time feels different in there. 'Course, he's a spirit now, so... maybe that's part of it.
*both now at the portal, after walking in a short silence*
Asami: Such a big crater... *looks towards the Colossus' remains, looks back at Korra after mumbling "Father..."* Uh. What are we doing first? Or after, for that matter?
Korra, concerned: Maybe we shouldn't think about business - and don't look at that metal thing. And forget after...
Asami: *determined* No. *Sighs* We both have responsibilities... Business is fine - and maybe I do need to talk it out more, about my father... *lone tear down her face* Snatched away, after making peace...
Korra: *distraught* I wish I knew what to say. Wherever Iroh takes us, whatever spirits he takes us to meet, they'll help. *looks directly at portal, then Asami, blushing slightly* A very kind, and pret- *blushing more*... uh, smart person once told me she'd be there for me. *no longer blushing, hugging Asami* I also remember she told me to enjoy one day during a very rough time, for someone else - so let's try and enjoy this. But not for Jinora - for each other.
*Asami now blushing slightly* Asami: All this time later. You... you remembered what I said.
Korra: *smiles* Yes. I don't think I know enough to do much more than give you a hug, but it's better than nothing. *smiles broader* Let's call this our "or anything".
Asami laughs: Sure - for now. *Korra gives her a curious look, Asami smiling mischievously* And no, I'm not explaining. *serious again* I feel a lot better... but I still want to talk to Iroh. About everything that's happened... *tugging on Korra* Let's go.
Korra: Now that sounds perfect.

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Speaking of scenes I'd add - take a look at this fanart of the Sato family:
http://i3.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/001/076/574/623.jpg
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I really like this. Even if it was just a short scene, even shorter than what we got for Zuko’s family life, this would have been really good in the actual show, for both Asami, and the two bending brothers. Maybe even Kuvira as well, her abandonment.

Instead of four seasons of showing and telling, we got more telling than showing… Oh well.
Tarrlok and Noatak got plot/character flashbacks. Korra saw the Yakone flashbacks. Tonraq and to an extent Unalaq got plot/character flashbacks. After Season 2, they sort of vanished, Old Wounds with Lin and Su, Korra Alone and some more background on Kuvira's break with Su etc notwithstanding.

Some kind of flashbacks, even as short as the ones Zuko had of him and his mother, would have helped add weight.

This, on the other hand, I agree about completely.  Asami desperately needed a flashback and never really got one.
Here's something else from KYM:

The original was posted four years ago, likely right after TLOK came out, so there's no super long time to stew and then post involved here.
 
I guess this is going against what I said about no big changes, but Season 1, I'd severely cut down on the love triangle, and add in stuff like this; Asami's mother to make Hiroshi's hatred more impactful, Mako and Bolin slices of life to make them deeper, and Korra's past as far as being sequestered away from the world at the South Pole and more on the White Lotus' negative/retarding influence on her development as a person.

"TL;DR": cutting the showing of the vast majority or all of the love triangle and bumping down the telling on character's backgrounds. Or even an extra episode in Book 1 to add more time.
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« Reply #249 on: Feb 14, 2016 02:27 pm »

 I would add in the world leaders actually reacting when Kuvira threatened to crush them and also add in there little off screen meeting after Wu's coronation.

Have Bolin and Varrick confirm that Kuvira really is purging the Earth Kingdom, which would give Izumi a reason to declare war on the Earth Empire, then they would go over the war plans and bash on Kuvira.

Raiko: She might use the weapon to attack Republic City. The only way to protect ourselves is with a preemptive strike.

Tenzin: My airbenders won't be part of an unprovoked attack.

Raiko: Fire Lord?

Fire Lord Izumi: You have the Fire Nation's support... From our airships, we will rain fire over their lands. A fire that will destroy everything. And out of the ashes, a new World will be born. A World in which none of the lands are Earth Empire and I am the supreme ruler of everything!

Raiko: But, Fire Lord Izu---

Fire Lord Izumi: The Fire Nation has spent too much of it's time not trying to dominate the Earth, and I refuse to drag my nation into another era of peace, unless there's no other choice. If you attack Kuvira, you're doing it with my army!

Raiko: Fine.

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